Well, here is the topic for you to comment and critique my short story, The Ronin. I know there are quite a few places that have awkward wording, but normally you do not proof read something and correct it until it is finished. This story is not finished. Regardless, I would very much like to hear what everyone has to say about it, and my writing style, which admittedly is probably totally different now than it was 4-5 years ago when I originally worked on this.