Musings of a Soul

Alyss

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So..... This is my writing diary :3
I'm currently trying to dig up some of my better works, but that seems impossible.... OTL
... Yes I have a habit of not making titles.... Maybe later :X
C&C is very much appreciated, as you can see I suck >o<

So here's a recent poem I had to write for my class :3
A simple garden with simple flowers
My simple life
Existing with plentiful sun and plentiful water
My plentiful life

Fellow plant life live in these peaceful times
Protected by a white fence
Blissfully ignorant
Of the horrors lurking on the outside
Until it is broken down
My shielded life

A foot that tramples all
Destroying the land that we live in
Crushing the existences around me
Never to awake again
What can I do?
My useless life

Stare in terror of paralysis
Unable to change their fate
Watching the others wither by a simple foot
Cries that reach a God that doesn’t exist
To be the last one alive
My lonely life
 
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Yay! You've opened a writing gallery!

As for the poem, ummmm, I'm not too good with poems, but it seemed to vary too much in terms of the meter. I'll give a more detailed analysis when I get back.
 

Alyss

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Mkay, I do random free verse so haha >o>
... And my teacher's standard is EXTREMELY low, so it's not very good :3
 

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Most teachers seem to be xD As long as it's words, and follows whatever theme they came up with, it will pass :p
 

Lovely.

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The poem wasn't bad! D< I liked it, the flow was kinda weird but still I got what you were trying to do with it~ :3 <3
 

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Thanks <3
I'm not as good as Haddy, and I don't like writing poems as much as stories haha....

Might put up a short story later (once I find it) :3