I like the style for this one. This is the first time I've seen a concept like this. Although I think you should have sharpened the render instead of the effects. Really nice though.
And overall, your works lack of depth and lighting. Typo could do some more work by going into the simplest way, i.e. no effects on the typo (but clipping masks would do) and simpler fonts. And don't place your text at the corners. It spoils the flow of the tag.